the US has the #1 most expensive healthcare system in the world, yet we rank roughly #42 in life expectancy.
Preach
Indecipherable huh … I bet it was a naughty word
Probably “fourth” based on context clues.
The naughtiest word of all.
This is the “lengthy manifesto?” I see no rambling, conspiracy theories, or even much editorializing. It’d fit on a standard index card. Most of this is a courtesy note to law enforcement. Sure it counts as a manifesto, but lengthy?
ACAB instincts aside, it’s almost charmingly naive that he thinks saying “it was all simple and I acted alone” is going to save anyone any effort, especially the people about to interrogate him for 72 hours straight.
To the Feds
Oh, Luigi. The feds already know all this. It’s literally their jobs to protect the billionaire parasites from the rest of us.
You think they don’t understand that?
This Post Got My Reddit Temp Banned :(
Could’ve used a proofread
frankly, these parasites simply had it coming
One of the best pieces of advice I got on my writing was to take out 2/3 of my -ly words.
frank, these parasites simp had it coming
Perfect is the enemy of good
It just sounds sophomoric. The focus on modifiers is very chuuni in a boyish sense. It’s clear that he was a STEM major
Pretty clear you’re a Karen.
And I thought I was bad whining about the fake manifesto that people were pushing around earlier.
Writing style aside. It’s concise and doesn’t preach. It’s a statement of admission and motivation. Nothing else.
Disagree on concise which was the point of my whole comment.
Read:
To the Feds, I’ll keep this short, because I do respect what you do for our country. To save you a lengthy investigation, I state plainly that I wasn’t working with anyone. This was trivial: some elementary social engineering basic CAD, a lot of patience. The spiral notebook, if present, has some straggling notes and To Do lists that illuminate the gist of it. My tech is pretty locked down because I work in engineering so probably not much info there. I do apologize for any strife of traumas but it had to be done. These parasites had it coming. A reminder: the US has the #1 most expensive healthcare system in the world, yet we rank roughly #42 in life expectancy. United is the [indecipherable] largest company in the US by market cap, behind only Apple, Google, Walmart. It has grown and grown, but as our life expectancy? No the reality is, these [indecipherable] have gotten too powerful, and they continue to abuse our country for immense profit because the American public has allwed them to get away with it. Obviously the problem is more complex, but I do not have space, and I do not pretend to be the most qualified person to lay out the full argument But many have illuminated the corruption and greed (e.g.: Rosenthal, Moore), decades ago and the problems remain. It is not an issue of awareness at this point, but clearly power games at play. I am the first to face it with such brutal honesty
Punchier. More direct. Adverbs are fine in moderation but this was way too many. I only wish he would’ve let me proofread this before doing the deed.
He did a fine job for not being a writer or even really attempting to be one. Sure it could have been better but it was more than good enough.
The writing was very bad imo but it’s the message that’s important here
Honestly, based on the class average for “political killing manifestos” it’s at least a passing grade.
It’s not an A, obviously, but met expectations and was clear in message, solid B- imo.
If there isn’t already an SMBC comic where an English professor supervillain threatens to blow up the Earth for the sole purpose of showing the public what a well written manifesto looks like then there should be
well actually
well
actuallyFTFY
I can’t beleive this guy didn’t use MLA approved style for his confession note, crazy world.
Prose =/= format
MLA handbooks have a lot of style advice
He should have had his manifesto/confession proof read???
He just put all his stats into charisma
